Saturday, October 13, 2012

The Light Shines Through My Broken Places

Daybreak over Tofino Inlet

Kids, the prompt over at Real Toads Friday was to take inspiration from the music of Waylon Jennings, his song "I've Always Been Crazy", or the topic  Outlaw Country. I  am behind, as usual, and decided to further complicate things by trying to write a pantoum......the crazyness enters in when I look back at the wrong places I once looked, hoping to find love......and needing to repeat the lesson, till I finally "graduated" into single bliss some decades ago. 

Light shines through my brokenness in sweet relief .
All  my shattered dreams bore visions new -
Heart honed in fire, molded in pain and grief,
Unworthy lovers taught me what is true.

All my shattered dreams bore visions new -
fashioned from rubble, newly forged from pain,
unworthy lovers taught me what is true.
I rose from ashes,  was made new again.

Fashioned from rubble, newly forged from pain,
Love, my wandering soul began to teach.
I rose from  ashes,  was made new again,
Heart open wide, and Heaven within my reach.

My wandering soul did Love begin to teach,
Heart honed in fire, molded in pain and grief-
Heart open wide, and Heaven within my reach
Light shining through my brokenness in sweet relief .

Am adding a link to the Poetry Pantry at Poets United, as it is gray and rainy today and am too tired to look thru the archives. This is a brand new poem:) 

37 comments:

  1. A beautiful, beautiful piece Sherry.

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  2. Incredible use of this most difficult poetic form ... lovely thoughts too.

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  3. We can only come to that inner peace once we make that very conscious effort to truly stop looking. Yes, I would call it a graduation into accepting the happiness of single 'bliss' too.
    Beautifully written Sherry.

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  4. My first pantoum and a good one at that.
    Interesting spin -- I imagine most will make their craziness positive and not a past delusion.
    Your graduation sounds wonderful.

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  5. I am impressed with your pantoum, Sherry. But it seems to have worked well to help convey your message. I love the last stanza and the fact that you are at peace and happy with where you are today!

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  6. I honor your strength, after many disappointments. I honor your poetry. I might not have caught that this was a pantom, it flowed so naturally. Good work.

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  7. I always find the pantoum cadence comforting, soothing. You remind me that I should work more with the form. Your message about brokenness, love, refinement is strong and true, here. This is a real keeper, Sherry!

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  8. smiles....nicely done to form....i love how the light breaks in...and often it is our cracks that allow that to happen...not the easiest stance to take in life...letting the light come in...but that is where we find peace...

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  9. you know what, Sherry? you ARE crazy! you're always like oh, that form, oh this form, that form is befuddling me whatEVER and i'm all in awe of you just saying, oh hell, i'll write a PANTOUM inspired by Waylon Jennings. a PANTOUM. that shit is HARD, my friend. and you write this, just spin it off, like no big deal, and it sings, and it's effortless, and it's brilliant and has something to say. I'M JUST POINTING OUT THE OBVIOUS HERE. you're just the bomb. i bow to you!
    xoxox your fan, Marian

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  10. very very lovely after the journey--pantoum allows effective repetitions here--to learn and to teach love of self means that Light came in those broken places.

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  11. This is lovely Sherry...sometimes there is such beauty born from broken places.

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  12. This is so impressive, Sherry. A rhymed pantoum, and the subject presented in such a sincere and heart-felt way. The repetitions took on a varied meaning within the new context, and built to a stunning conclusion. I'm sure every reader can take something away with them.

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  13. lovely lovely lovely!!!

    "I rose from ashes, was made new again"

    *sigh* i can relate to this...

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  15. Sherry! What a fantastic use of the form, and phrase. "Light shines through my brokenness in sweet relief."
    Oh, yes.

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  16. Sherry,

    A most beautiful set of words, in any poetic form...heartfelt and meaningful. Loves won and lost; together with the rebirth of wisdom.

    Happy Autumnal Sunday Sherry,
    Eileen

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  17. excellent use of the form. and as full of wisdom as ever.

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  18. Beautiful pantoum Sherry ~ I like the renewal of being new again ~

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  19. Wow.....frankly, you had me with that brilliant first line.
    (no pun intended!)

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  20. I love the pantoum form and you used it so well!

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  21. Gorgeous Sherry!! I can so relate to this. I'm thankful the light never ceases to shine.

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  22. You picked a perfect form for this Sherry! You built a lovely crescendo, from the pieces to the whole. Really enjoyed this :-)

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  23. Beautifully written and ultimately so hopeful! I really enjoyed this.

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  24. Beautiful pantoum, Sherry! We have a similar form which we call 'pantun' with an a b a b rhyme. The last two lines are the advice, challenges or statements. The first two provide the rhymes and may not have any connection to the last two.Nicely!

    Hank

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  25. You took on the biggie [pantoum] and created a beauty. 'brokenness', 'heart honed', 'fashioned from rubble', 'forged from pain'
    every phrase a winner.

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  26. What beautiful sunrise! And what a beautiful pantoum from a beautiful lady.

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  27. I have to join the praise above: Awesome commitment to form!

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  28. I love that the light shines through, and I'm sure though broken, you know as much about mending and healing. After all, if we are to go on, the breaking allows us to learn about the healing. I love this.

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  29. Wonderful! Great subject for a pantoum given the way that form revolves and evolves. Works just perfectly. And your pantoum flows so smoothly. Perfect for the Outlaws too! Great job. k.

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  30. This is beautiful Sherry. How wonderful to find yourself. There are many things that look like love, but finally you found the real thing in you.

    (Hope you had a nice weekend.)

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  31. Applause....what a beautiful piece, Sherry!Never knew that pantoum could flow so effortlessly...Want to try my hands on this some time :)
    Wonderful...wonderful piece of poetry!

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  32. Just an extraordinary piece Sherry--beautiful write

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  33. Such a graceful dance this form is for you...the lines you weaved back through are so emotive. This is beautifully written, Sherry!

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  34. I love what you wrote and how brave you were~ This was wonderful and shows just how wild spirited you truly are~ ((hugs))

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  35. Im so glad I joined poets united...Every week I get to read such great works.lovely poem.

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  36. Sherry your words are just magical...this could be my favorite of yours!

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