Friday, January 24, 2014

The Wedding Dress in the Lake


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They found a wedding dress in the lake.
Sodden and sad, they pulled it out.
Where was the bride, this dress she wore?
They dredged the lake, they combed the shore.

A white horse watched from the piney woods,
a tear running down its rider's cheek -
the one the bride had loved so well,
a lad pink-cheeked and young and meek..

Once was a young girl, soft and fair,
betrothed to one for whom she did not care.
At the steps of the altar, she turned and ran,
and that's where this tale both ended - and began.



posted for Brian's way cool prompt at dVerse - to tell him a story.

29 comments:

  1. This is great, both rhythm and tale! so enjoyed:)

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  2. oh nice....love how you explain it in the end...and that becomes both the beginning and the end...very nicely done sherry...you def set the tension and mystery early and makes me want to know more...

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  3. oh better to run when you don't love the guy you are supposed to marry - that you mention a beginning in the close hints that she found a way to escape and that just the dress got lost... i hope..smiles

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  4. The white horse on the edge, a great image of the wild and the beautiful. Lovely story with so many layers.

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  5. Aw. How it began and ended. Tragedy, opera. Nicely captured, as understated as "Richard Cory" a Robinson poem.

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  6. Better late than never to decide not to marry. I want to know more about the two....

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  7. Well as long as she didn't end up down in that lake too... Loved this tale, Sherry. Yes, better to cut and run at the altar than suffer lifelong regret.

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  8. So many powerful word associations. Very fine.

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  9. I like the way you have told this story but you certainly make us want to know more.

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  10. So well done, Sherry - like a Grimm's tale, melodic then dark ~

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  11. Oh this is exactly how a story should be told.. with a twist of comprehension at the final word.. still enough blanks to fill in for a curious reader.

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  12. How tragic! I do hope she safely made her escape.

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  13. What a fantastic tale. You are one great story teller. I like the rhyming in this and the ending - oh that's nice.

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  14. This is amazing and I want to know more what happens next!.

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  15. A sweet sad story told in your own voice. Very nice, Sherry. One is still not sure she is not running around some place--maybe on the horse! K. manicddaily

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  16. How sad in the ending ~ Perhaps it was for the best ~

    Enjoyed this tale & picture too ~

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  17. love the rhythm and the mystery and eager for the next part...

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  18. Let's hope she didn't drown -- but that the ran away.

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  19. good stuff Sherry leaving us with unanswered questions so the imagination can work...

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  20. Sad, but so well done! Maybe she got away ...one hopes! A forced life is a prison sentence....ick!

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  21. Sherry I hope that this is a beginning...a new and brighter tomorrow for her! A brilliant tale woven in a beautiful rhyme!

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  22. Sad story beautifully written. Love it!
    Anna :o]

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  23. Flawless rhythm and amazing storytelling, Sherry! Gorgeous! And your header shot is amazing, too.

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  24. I love that the woman in your story decided to stand up for herself and reclaim her life. It’s never too late to do so. This is actually an inspiring and empowering piece. Well done again, Sherry!

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  25. Perfect rhyme and an intense story so well said ..:-)

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