[Death of a Mermaid image from the internet
posted for Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads Picture Prompt Friday
Reposted for Poets United's Poetry Pantry February 2, 2014]
Reposted for Poets United's Poetry Pantry February 2, 2014]
She bursts out of the sea
a winged dryad
in the foam,
her gown
all the colors
of the ocean
that's her home.
in the foam,
her gown
all the colors
of the ocean
that's her home.
Seahorses
cascading
cascading
from her
seaweed-laden hair,
seaweed-laden hair,
she rides waves
outlined in beauty
by the luminescence
outlined in beauty
by the luminescence
there.
Her home is a cavern
below the coral reefs,
her bed a captain's cabin
in a ship that never sleeps.
She dines daintily with whales,
plankton and krill from their baleen,
a shared feast of tiny edibles
on leaves
of darkest green.
When lungs grow tight
that's when you'll see her,
looking like a wave,
her wings
faintly visible,
face beautiful
and grave.
face beautiful
and grave.
She flings herself onto the rocks,
draws back
in sinuous dance,
under a silvery midnight sky,
her mournful song
perchance
remembering
a time Before
that stopped too soon,
and she wont be back
until the next
full moon.
She sails away
on a ghost ship
with an emerald-laden mast.
As the golden sunset
takes her in,
that stopped too soon,
and she wont be back
until the next
full moon.
She sails away
on a ghost ship
with an emerald-laden mast.
As the golden sunset
takes her in,
she slips into
the past.
the past.
oh I love this!!! brilliantly creative - the story so defined and established - fantastic write here! truly enjoyed it!
ReplyDeleteYou have characterized her well, Sherry@
ReplyDeleteThis has all the mystique of established mythology, or of an ancient ballad sung by a sad man playing a lute..
ReplyDeleteI smiled to see the seahorses cascading from her hair, as did my personification of the sea.. I'm glad yours has escaped death altogether by becoming immortal.
I think my favourite stanza is the one that describes her home beneath the waves - it appeals to my imagination, and I must note the cadences created by the subtle use of rhyme.
A haunting description of this sea creation.
ReplyDeleteWow... fabulous descriptions, a powerful sea dance of waving words and actions.
ReplyDeleteYou painted a masterpiece with this work Sherry.
Excellent write, I love the image of her that grows and flows through the piece.
ReplyDeleteAye, Sherry, I know I wasn't the only one who could see them.
ReplyDeleteSherry, this is absolutely beautiful. Very descriptive and great word choice. Mighty fine job!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this:
Her home is a cavern
below the coral reefs,
her bed a captain's cabin
in a ship that never sleeps.
Liked the rhyme that danced within this poem.
beautiful imagery Sherry... this line drew me in "her gown
ReplyDeleteall the colors
of the ocean" especially:-)
This is beautiful and the image you found is the perfect compliment to your poem.
ReplyDeleteSherry, what a beautiful sight this would be to behold. I like the idea of an 'emerald-laden mist.' You brought the image to life with your words!
ReplyDeleteWhat a stunning apparition you have shown, Sherry! The painting you chose complements your poem in a most effective manner.
ReplyDeleteExcellent all round. Great flow and so imaginative.
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery pictured in your words. A tale of the life of mermaid so poignantly penned.
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Great imagery pictured in your words. The tale of the life of mermaid penned in such a poignant way.
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P.s.- Please ignore my previous comment, which I posted by mistake.
After I saw the image you put there in the beginning, I thought it would take something special to do justice to the image. To be frank the poem was absolutely perfect. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThis is a most beautiful ballad. It could be as old as the sea. Lovely, Sherry! This is one of those "I wish I had written this" for me.
ReplyDeletevery vivid imagery
ReplyDeletethis feels like a myth or story that you might tell children...its cool the life you have given that burst of sea mist, turned woman---personally i rather like the sea horses in her hair....and the life energy she has....
ReplyDeleteSo much image in this poem. It reminds a poem I wrote "Pandora". Beautiful writing!
ReplyDeletethis is most beautiful.. the beauty of a breaking wave, but also the sadness of perfection lost.
ReplyDeleteI always wanted to meet a mermaid . . . now even more!
ReplyDeleteMermaids - Wild women of the sea.
Perfect subject for a wild woman to write about.
You've captured the spirit of the ocean with such beauty. I can see the Goddess as a motherly soul who protects all life.
ReplyDeleteIt was like watching a movie, Sherry! Trust me...It's sooo imaginative! I love it.It's beautiful and has a great feel to it.
ReplyDeletegreat use of imagery and fantasy, luv the companion photo; awesome write
ReplyDeleteHave a nice Sunday
much love...
packed full of mystique and story telling Sherry...all kinds of visuals and imagery... loved it...
ReplyDeleteOh Sherry, this poem is one of your best. I love the imagery, it went straight to that place within me, which thrives on stories and magic and beauty. You really outdid yourself here.
ReplyDeletehow utterly beautiful this is, Sherry - inspired writing, as if the words found you in the deep...
ReplyDeleteWow! What a powerful water element you have created here, Sherry! ~ at the end 4 last lines - I see little kids, listening to your story and open the mouth in surprise: "Why? " :)x Enjoyed very much!
ReplyDeleteLove love this Sherry---gorgeous imagery throughout--
ReplyDeleteYou brought her to life well Sherry. Burst out of the sea and off the page.
ReplyDeleteyou have captured this so enchantingly!
ReplyDeleteA living under the sea that creates that certain euphoria of romances of a wonderful story. Great write Sherry!
ReplyDeleteHank
I love the imagery you have created here, Sherry. This is a beautiful post.
ReplyDeleteLovely and haunting lines !
ReplyDeleteNice composition! I really the first three lines....create lovely imagery!:)
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