Tuesday, November 17, 2015

BLACKBIRD - A VILLANELLE

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I might have told you, had I been less shy,
how I'd adore you till the end of time,
but words caught in my throat, and voiceless, I.

I needed words from you to get us by,
but you could promise naught, in prose or rhyme.
I might have told you, had I been less shy.

We loved in silence, my heart hid its cry.
Without the words, I acted out in mime.
The words caught in my throat, and voiceless, I.

I sought a promise. Your eyes sought the sky.
Our love was new, and needed much more time.
I might have told you, had I been less shy.

I hung on tight, you tried so hard to fly,
the mountain peaks we sought too hard a climb.
The words caught in my throat, and voiceless, I.

Blackbird, Beauty, soaring through the sky,
you live forever in this heart of mine.
I might have told you, had I been less shy,
but words caught in my throat, and voiceless, I.

A poem from last April, reposted for Real Toads' The Tuesday Platform

12 comments:

  1. I LOVE this villanelle, Sherry. Especially the way it all came together in the final stanza.

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  2. Wonderful villanelle, Sherry. So easy to relate, it reminds me of two married kids, the one growing up before the other. She leaves to sample what she's learned. Always has he kept her in his heart.
    I like the villanelle and think I should try one. But not today.
    ..

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  3. What a strong Villanelle... the blackbird, as a symbol or for real is such a focus for that connection, for the love and foreverness...

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  4. Wow, this was plaintive and masterful. Great poem.

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  5. Wow, this was plaintive and masterful. Great poem.

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  6. Bravo, Sherry! I love this form and you brought it to life~

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  7. What a beautiful mastery of the form. I feel the longing, the words held to tight in the throat.

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  8. Such a soaring heart-song, Sherry, finely crafted and bittersweetly true. Thanks for this.

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  9. I am deeply touched by this! Beautiful writing!

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  10. Sherry, this is wonderful, the perfect form to speak of love and loss and memories that will always belong to us.

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  11. Beauiful, Sherry. Sad when one looks back and wonders what would happen if you had.........

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