Friday, May 16, 2014

Night in the Black Forest

photo: Google images : myswiess.wordpress.com

Night is falling fast within the forest deep.
My pace quickens. I  feel the dark trees breathe.
Paws pad beside me, faithful, guardian.
We must find shelter, somewhere safe to sleep.

My pace quickens. I  feel the dark trees breathe.
Tall, dark, foreboding, branches lean above my head.
We must find shelter, somewhere safe to sleep.
The night draws close. The forest fills with dread.

Tall, dark, foreboding, branches lean above my head.
My wolf companion whines deep in his throat.
The night draws close. The forest fills with dread.
I lean to pat his ruffled, glistening coat.

The night draws close. The forest fills with dread.
Paws pad beside me, faithful,  guardian.
I lean to pat his ruffled glistening coat.
Night is falling fast within the forest deep.

a pantoum, for Hannah's prompt at Real Toads: Transforming Friday: the Black Forest



38 comments:

  1. Beautiful. The companions strengthen each other as the repetition becomes more familiar.

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  2. I love this form!! And I love the feel of this poem! *smile*

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  3. Love this form as well Sherry! Just beautiful!

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  4. I love a pantoum, and this is wonderful! Each line holds its own special beauty.

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  5. So mysterious! This is the perfect form to help build the suspense.

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  6. I feel this almost as a response to Frost's stopping by woods on a snowy evening... but with the added threat.. the form worked so great here.

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  7. Perfect form for this, Sherry...it brings the echo of the deep wood and I love the feeling of comfort found in your guardian. Well done...thank you for joining!!

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  8. This is very atmospheric, Sherry. Enjoyed this.

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  9. You had me feeling like I was in a movie! Love this one~ Well Done....
    I will think of you when I walk outside tonight and look at the stars~

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  10. Excellent work Sherry. Paws pad the pace of darkness, silently, until sight is no more, but your faithful guardian will guide you to his everlasting light.

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  11. "Paws pad beside me, faithful, guardian"...the line brings so much relief in the dark, foreboding night
    ....beautifully worded poem....

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  12. The lovely nature in its glory:)

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  13. ah the repetition works really well...i hear your friend in th paws padding as well...cool piece...

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  14. A lovely form & perfect for a night in black forest with the faithful guardian ~

    Happy long weekend Sherry~

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  15. I love the shivers this piece gave me, a very Tolkien feel to it especially the scary forests! I love love love the wolf element as well... :)

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  16. This poem is an adventurous one!!! Love all the wet, looking for shelter, forest action. When I was little I'd go out into the rain and climb up a mountain behind my former home in Pago Pago and just sing in the rain. This poem makes me reminisce...thanks for that Sherry.

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  17. A pantoum is so hard and you've risen to the challenge beautifully--really well done, Sherry--thanks. k.

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  18. Gosh Sherry - I really do love this - everything about it from form to content - to the gentle comforting feeling that I get that now allows me to get up and go to bed - feeling safe and sheltered :)

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  19. no fun to be alone in a dark forest and it's good to know there's someone walking next to you... a comforting feel

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  20. You have conveyed the atmosphere of some forests very convincingly. I too would go there with a dog.

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  21. Ah, the magic and mysticism of the forest ... you created an enchanting atmosphere. Love the repetition and form. The wolf makes it just a tad haunting, perfect! Smiles :)

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  22. Very fine use of this form. Wonderful message as well--that we all have a need not to be alone in facing the darkness.
    Steve K.

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  24. Good grief Sherry! Run! :-)
    Well written.
    ZQ

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  25. A poem where one's senses awaken. Spectacular! :)

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  26. I love pantoums. Well done Sherry!

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  27. Feel the intense of the line 'The night draws close. The forest fills with dread.' and like the relief sounds 'Paws pad beside me, faithful, guardian.' ~ very effective form.

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  28. I took this as almost symbolic...the dark forest, the dread, a dark and uneasy time...to having a faithful companion, to "lean" on...and to find safety and comfort together. Great work with this form Sherry.

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  29. I felt my heart beat a bit faster as I read your poem the feeling of darkness but, somehow finding comfort in a friend. Interesting form as well. I always enjoy reading your work.

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  30. The image portrayed is so vivid...the deep forest and the atmosphere.. I love the poetic form too.. :-)

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  31. A story conveyed poetically...
    Good one!

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  32. This is wonderful! Just enough and enough space….

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  33. Canine and wilderness . . . with a touch of edginess . . . It's definitely you, Sherry.

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  34. I loved the picture you painted with your words Sherry, it is so vivid and beautiful. :)

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