Thursday, November 14, 2013

American Sentences from Canada




Midnight crescent moon on navy sky, clouds scudding past, battleship gray.

Afghan vets' Antarctic trek : wounded warriors walking to inspire.

Call to Tofino: question asked, hopes suspended, dreams arising.

Oldster falls over fat golden dog:  plethora of quaking fat rolls.

Pondering the imponderables, one must  surrender self to trust.


at dVerse, the challenge (and challenge it is!) is to write American sentences, a form created by Ginsberg, each line having seventeen syllables. My "lines" dont fit all in one line on my template - but each one is seventeen syllables:)

31 comments:

  1. Oh yes this is a challenge.. but very inspiring both to read and to write...loved the last one.

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  2. I smiled (perhaps I shouldn't) at the oldster falling over the fat golden dog...I hope the oldster didn't get hurt, but the image amused me.

    Ah, I hope the call to Tofino comes to reality, Sherry! And soon, very soon!

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  3. I enjoyed your Canadian American sentences Sherry. "Midnight crescent moon on navy sky, clouds scudding past, battleship gray" - beautiful image! And I hope your dream comes true!

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  4. the fat dog...this is just an awesome image...ha... made me smile as well.. the wounded warriors made me swallow..

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  5. Self trust - that's hard to surrender to! Loved this combination...

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  6. These are like aphorisms... the wounded warriors were my favorite image, though I'm putting out a lot of energy for Tofino. And that last one! I'm going off now to "surrender self to trust." (A short nap before prayer meeting.)

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  7. Really good play of words. Varied and vivid images present in your words. :-)
    -HA

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  8. hahaha plethora eh? lol....be careful where you step sherry....def that trek is inspiring....and def on the trust....esp when there are things well beyond our control...

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  9. I like what you did with these. Are we poetic neighbors, me in Tacoma, WA, and you up there on Vancouver Island? how cool is that? My fave, also, is the Afghan Vets line.

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  10. Last I checked, Canada is part of North America, so no problem there. My favorites are the first and last verses. :)

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  11. I love yours Sherry! I will have to go check this out-
    YOURS is spot on-oh, that is likely British-oops~

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  12. I specially like the first one and I hope the call to Tofino comes soon ~ I hope the oldster is good and full of smiles ~

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  13. love the feel of the first and the dog made me smile - and the last one, well, was just what I needed at this moment - thanks Sherry - K

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  14. Very very good my dear! Love them all!

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  15. Well done! I love the imagery, especially in the 4th! :-)

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  16. love all the images framed in 17 syllables...

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  17. I feel like we had afternoon tea and heard a great set of conversations - we went from cool to worried to concerned to laughter. What a great afternoon. Makes me wish I lived down the street. Your work is always spot-on, poignant and perfect.

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  18. Quivering rolls of fat and the fat lab had me in stitches....bloody dogs!:)

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  19. Sherry,

    The 3rd and 5th lines reach into the soul..I hope answers come whispering soon.

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  20. Very descriptive sentences full of images and feelings!

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  21. Wonderfully descriptive. Love!
    Anna :o]

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  22. ah you kept it tight -

    this does spark my imagination - even so ever early in the morning - so thanks to you

    may yours be sparked today as well!

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  23. you did lovely work with this prompt! by the way i love the name of your blog! 'stardreaming.' :)

    stacy lynn mar

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  24. this oldster has tripped over the dog several times... :) lovely poem...

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  25. ha!! vivid!! and so diverse from nature to humour and a poignant one. lovely!

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  26. Love the last sentence, we have to face the truth as it is with no hiding...~ Great on prompt!

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  27. I think you've really captured what Ginsberg was on about.

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  28. Oh very nice...loved the first one sets a lovely picture...very descriptive and poetic lovely work!

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  29. I love that last one, Sherry! Ponder, surrender, trust ... wonderful thoughts :)

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  30. This is cool. I like the last line best, but they're all pictures in my mind.

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