Saturday, June 22, 2013

The Crystal Ships Are Leaving

Jim Morrison~tumblr.com

The crystal ships are leaving.
Across a pale green dawn they glide,
disappearing beyond the horizon
without a trace.

Did your soul float away,
un-tethered,
from its warm
then too-cool vessel,
soar through the ceiling
in search of that freedom
you spent your life seeking?

Your songs were
your very soul, speaking.

Life was pain,
then it was golden,
then it was
gone.

Susie has given us the challenge at Toads this weekend to use one of the titles of Jim Morrison's songs in a new poem. I chose The Crystal Ship, as the image is so beautiful. I also used "without a trace", the final line in his poem of that title. "I'll disappear without a trace, I promise."

I once owned three small crystal ships, glass art created in Gastown in the 70's, intricately beautiful. They disappeared, as did that time in my life.

 I watched a clip about Jim dying in the bathtub - the  vessel I refer to. 

27 comments:

  1. Sherry, this is amazing. The ending really speaks of his life in such few words. Thanks so much for taking part in the challenge!

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  2. That last stanza is thought provoking. Life a pain, then golden, then gone. Often I think life might be golden, then a pain, then gone.....but I do like your order better. Love the imagery of the crystal ship.....

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  3. Reminds me of Jim Morrison, definitely.

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  4. You met the challenge well.

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  5. I don't know the song you wrote of...I was one of The Partridge Family and Cowsills few. lol. But your poetry is beautiful and does sound like his life. Perhaps his soul was in all his songs since the story in mine is parallel although very different words. I like yours much better!

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  6. Very touching Sherry ~ We spend our lives searching for that spark and meaning, then to find it all goes away or is gone ~

    Happy Sunday ~

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  7. Your songs were your very soul - beautiful! Happy weekend!

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  8. Ah! The song playing that Summer night!------:-)
    Aloha

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  9. Wow you really nailed this one Sherry how perfect!!! Now I think I might have messed up on this chalenge but thats okay - it's sunday.

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  10. You did very well with this challenge Sherry. It does seem to reflect Jim Morrison and his life.

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  11. Nicely done. The Crystal Ship was my choice too.

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  12. I love what you have done....I am excited about doing this challenge! YOU nailed it~

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  13. So lovely and speaks directly to heart

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  14. the time of your life disappeared, but for your shining a light on it through your words now. i am grateful for the chance to read them, Sherry. xo

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  15. Love this, love Jim Morrison whom I did not discover until around 2004 (don't ask) ;) I like the manner in which you used his song to philosophize.

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  16. Beautifully done. And I agree with the similarity with Jim Morrison.

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  17. what a progression in his life eh? and in death he perhaps found what his soul was seeking all along...

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  18. The last three lines make it seem easy. They would be fine on a gravestone too. I felt all of this poem very much, a tribute!

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  19. So nice Sherry. I love what you did with his titles. Funny, I used some of the same imagery though differently.

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  20. The last stanza is so lovely!

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  21. Talent, wealth, doesn't mean much if you don't have inner peace. Well done, Sherry.

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  22. Our very souls speaking ... what poetry is.

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  23. This poem has a dream-like quality, Sherry. Wonderful words!

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  24. Beautiful Sherry...beautiful and poignant.

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  25. Perfectly expressed and sadly beautiful.

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  26. our songs as our very soul is truly amazing. life is beautiful and short. how to makes sense of it and the injustices is a challenge. the crystal ships gliding is breathtaking.

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