Saturday, June 1, 2013

Stuck on a Reef in the Tunnel of Love




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I got stuck on a reef in the tunnel of love,
and this is why love didn't last.          
             So busy bailing, love blew right past,               .
stuck on a reef in the tunnel of love.
Charted my way in by the North Star's glow,
but lost my way when the light dimmed low.
Got stuck on a reef in the tunnel of love,
                         and this is why love didnt last.                                                      
                                                          
[I tried my hand at a triolet, 
I dont think I've quite caught on yet.]

The fair Hannah at Real Toads has issued us a challenge: to write about the tunnel of love. The photo she provided is of train tracks going into a tunnel but to me the tunnel of love is always in water, the lovers in a small boat. I vaguely remember some amusement ride, one time, like that, when I was much much younger. Or perhaps it was a dream.

22 comments:

  1. Ha, sometimes the Tunnel of Love has a lot of pitfalls! Fun poem, Sherry.

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  2. Yay! A triolet! I'm so happy to see you tried your hand at this form, Sherry. Each line is superb and your repeating line carries the reader along. Blast those reefs and leaky boats!

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  3. THAT was not a dream ... though we were much much younger. I remember smooching in the Tunnel of Love.

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  4. Love the metaphor!! And kudos on the triolet!!

    I enjoy this visual, Sherry, "Charted my way in by the North Star's glow"

    So beautiful!

    Thank you for writing!

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  5. Good shot at the triolet, pal. I love form challenges, but am hesitant about trying them on my own. Okay, more than just hesitant...absolutely cowardly.
    Well done (and I know about that reef).
    K

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  6. Lovely form, the repetition makes this a happy loss, almost.

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  7. Me too! I remember that ride. As I recall, they were tubby little vessels with big rubber bumpers. Either that, or at least three of us are blithely bobbing along in a common ether. Thank you for the introduction to a triolet--I love learning about new forms.
    Your poem is rhythmically cohesive, fluid and comically perceptive about the perils of love.

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  8. Great triolet..the repetition is so effective!

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  9. I don't remember ever being in a tunnel of love. But your poem made me think that hopefully life is our tunnel of love.

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  10. nice, Sherry! i love the triolet form.

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  11. I've got the perfect tune for that, what a wonderful poem

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  12. Love the image and where you took it. And loved the new form, it works well with your sense of humor. This was fun to read.

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/06/02/awakening-a-body-once-living/

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  13. The tunnel of love can lead to lots of fun experiences. And it's all the more fun when two young hearts find the time for it. Nicely Sherry!

    Hank

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  14. LOL..I think the triolet worked well At least you gave it a shot...more practice that's what's needed:)..the love thing not the triolet:)

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  15. I think your triolet works... and yes, that's how I remember the tunnel of love rides too:-)

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  16. There are so many reef to get stuck on and most of us get hung up on them and let love pass by.

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  17. Hi Sherry! Yes, I remember those rides, always on water--reefs are a real hazard :-) enjoyed your triolet!

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  18. i think it's cute and clever, especially that you wrote off a prompt.

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  19. Your humor makes it so fun to read!
    Loved it
    :D

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