Wednesday, December 5, 2012

"More, Please"

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Ella's prompt at Poets United's Wonder Wednesday is to write a poem in Dickens style about not having the Christmas spirit, like Scrooge. Before I saw the prompt, which I knew would be something about Dickens, the following poem wrote itself. It isn't in the voice of Scrooge, but a more beloved Dickens character, and I submit it in place of the Bah! Humbug - because Christmas is all about More, More, More.....right? (hee hee just kidding!)


I was the Oliver Twist child,
freckles across my nose,
hair in wisps,
eyes round and seeking
someone to say
I was
worthy of Being.

I carried my empty bowl
the long, long way
to the Grim Headmaster,
and asked
in quavering tones
that echo, still, 
down through
all the years:
"Please, Sir,
can I have
Some More?
More of Everything,
please."

21 comments:

  1. I am 99.9% sure this wonderful poem is alluding to Olivier Twist rather than David Copperfield.


    http://ynaija.com/blog/2011/12/28/who-wants-jara/

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  2. This more, more, is not so fun, now that I am the one who must provide it!

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  3. OMG! You are so totally right, Lolly. Argh. Thank you!

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  4. Twisted this around, I see! An important thought for winter joy.

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  5. I love this~ Yes, sign me up and where is my bowl?! Love it~
    You remind me of my cousin, who was little and went to church. When the collection plate came by, he helped himself, lol Yes, more...

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  6. Oh, as kids we were all Oliver Twist in our house..lol
    Loved this Sherry and, loved your comment on mine today too :)
    Yes, mum's are never perfect but, they are (mostly) all heroes ;)

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  7. I love the collection plate story - gee, a bowl of money. Cool! THAT'S the kind of bowl I need!

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  8. Ohyes, perfect, I love the book and films and everything about Oliver twist

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  9. We all want more!

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/12/05/tree-time/

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  10. Fantastic job with this, Sherry!

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  11. Oh well, it's a great poem. I love how prompts stir our imaginations and you did great with this one... at least it was from a Dickens book. And let's face it, it fits in perfectly with the Scrooge story.

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  12. Sherry,

    This was delightful version of the original tale. I think you can add this poem, to your growing collection of 'Twisted Tales,' Sherry:)
    Hope you are finding the Christmas spirit already!!
    Best wishes,
    Eileen:)

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  14. Oh, very cute. Oliver is such a sympathetic character.

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  15. seeking someone to say i was worthy of being...that part right there got my heart...and then the asking for it...a bit more of everything...oy, my heart strings are strumming...smiles...

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  16. This is touching Sherry. Made me think of all the children, worthy of being, who need more of everything. I hope our hearts are full of more so we can give and give.

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  17. More! Have you heard the song "Everything"? It's from the soundtrack of the lamentably awful Streisand/Kristofferson take on the wonderful story "A Star Is Born." She sings: "I don't want much/I just want more... give me the words and I will sing: I want everything, everything!" It includes wanting the perfect twin (one who moves out as I move in). I'm a Dickens kid, too, in a different way. As a follower of Jesus, I love giving to charities in the name of friends and family; as a committed Christian, I despise the WalMartattion of in all. You know. Feeling better, and you will see in later posts... love and thanks for all your support, honey. Amy

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  18. What a great Twist on Oliver! :o)
    Merry Christmas!

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  19. When I was growing up there was't enough really, so I would have been in line with Oliver with my bowl

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